redo the essay make it better

The essay needs to be made better. Everything has to be done well.

This essay has a lot of promise, but it felt very disorganized. You need basic paragraphing, MLA format, an overall organization to your paper, specific evidence from the readings, better proofread sentences, and you need more complex analysis. I would highly encourage you to revise this essay for a better score.

This is my teachers note.